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Images blur at the edges of my sight.
Heavy lashes fall over steely eyes,
Trying to block You out.

Sounds skirt past my ears,
Voices laughing and taunting.

Your grip on my heart tightens,
Pressing your will upon me.

Thump...
The fear fills my heart,
Thump...
To spread out and feed my veins.
Thump...

I've been here before...
But last time, Your hold on me was soft.
Loving.
You tried to help me, and I listened.

But this time, my body
Is deaf to You.
So You must use fear;
You must use my own nerves
To reach me.
Save me.
Attack me.

My hands grasp at the clutter on my desk,
And find the bottle; the cure.
The lid flies off, and I take the pill.

Slowly, gradually...
You fall silent.
Your voice trailing off with words of warning.
©2008-2009 *DarkBlysse
:icondarkblysse:

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I... don't quite know what to say. This just spilled out a few minutes ago...

My attempt at describing my panic attacks.

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:icongelatinous:
very moving, I can feel the sense of panic

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-- I'm in my own little world, but it's ok they know me there --

sinx = six (calculus people should get it lol)
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n
:icondarkblysse:
Thanks so much. :hug:

Next time I'll try to write one right after an attack... not a week later! :lol: Might come out better.
:icongelatinous:
I think it turned out great! :hug:

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-- I'm in my own little world, but it's ok they know me there --

sinx = six (calculus people should get it lol)
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n
:icondarkblysse:
Thanks. :) I took it into the literature chatroom here, and they told me it wasn't worth being reviewed. :( I'm glad someone liked it.
:icongelatinous:
Mwah! you're quite welcome!

did they give a reason or was it a flat no?

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-- I'm in my own little world, but it's ok they know me there --

sinx = six (calculus people should get it lol)
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n
:icondarkblysse:
They said it was too awful to review...
:icongelatinous:
wtf, that's lame. I think it's great!

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-- I'm in my own little world, but it's ok they know me there --

sinx = six (calculus people should get it lol)
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n
:icongelatinous:
very welcome!

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-- I'm in my own little world, but it's ok they know me there --

sinx = six (calculus people should get it lol)
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n

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